Through this year we have been writing essays based on the main character's characterization, and also supporting with evidence from the book quotes. In the alchemis essay I had demonstrated appropriate ideas an content, because I have appeared to know a clear understanding of the topic and had also included many details to support with evidence.
Also I have cleary stated my ideas. For example, in the Alchemist essay I have clearly explained why perseverance, courage and confidence made him successful to his goals. However in my Julius Caesar essay, though I was on topic with little details I didnt explain how my quotations had relate to the main idea of the paragraph. Therefore, I think I could improve on my writing skills better by expressing an interesting and relevant details and suitable quotaions from the book, explaining clearly how the quotation relate. Sometimes, I do go off topic, therefore maybe I should improve on it too.
My writing demonstrates appropriate organization in the Alchemist essay because I have clear thesis statement and pretty good topic and conclusions. However, in Julius Caesar essay I didnt really have appropriate organization, because my concluding sentence wasnt strong enough neither my topic sentence. Also the thesis statement was a little bit un clear. I could improve my writing to demonstrate better organization by checking if my conclusion summarizes all my ideas and to form context prior.
By comparing my Alchemist and Julius Caesar essay, I didnt make an improvement, because I was really poor with organization and supporting with evidence and how the quotes relate and sometimes by going off topic. For Julius Caesar essay, I didnt support my sentences strongly, and didn't really express my thoughts about Brutus characterization . It was also hard for the readers to understand the message that i wanted to communicate through this essay. However, in Santiago's journey as there was plenty time, i showed deeper understanding on the topic and wrote developed ideas supporting with significant quotes.
In this two essay's I have communicated effectively because though I was poor at explaining the c quotaions I have actually stated pretty good details in order to make the reader undersatnd it. Also I tried to write significant details to connect back to the topic and my ideas. in order to communicate my thought clearly with audiences. To achieve this goal, I tried to give significant and well-supported details to prove my ideas and topics. I hope I improve my writing skill to communicate effectively with readers and write better essay.
Monday, 12 April 2010
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